tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7091756463128804432.post7644798740859045571..comments2024-03-27T02:55:10.109-07:00Comments on Irish Papist: The Man Who Could Make Worlds, Chapters One to ThreeMaolsheachlannhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/09406722311993627528noreply@blogger.comBlogger4125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7091756463128804432.post-5426150258384366792014-03-15T06:35:23.644-07:002014-03-15T06:35:23.644-07:00Thanks Antaine! If I ever become a professional no...Thanks Antaine! If I ever become a professional novelist, I will employ you as my proofreader!! Seriously, thanks for pointing those out, I'll correct them.<br /><br />I'm so glad you like the story so far. I will publish more of it soon.Maolsheachlannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09406722311993627528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7091756463128804432.post-76996743523957252782014-03-15T06:22:59.316-07:002014-03-15T06:22:59.316-07:00This is a really interesting story Maolsheachlann....This is a really interesting story Maolsheachlann. When I first saw the length of it I was considering reading it later but I got drawn into it really quickly.<br /><br />I hate to be nit-picky again since I don't think you're planning on publishing the sotry or anything, but just some little mistakes I noticed:<br />*In chapter 1 Billy is 15, but the next chapter says he's 14<br />*Scott asks Billy why he doesn't go in the daytime, but chapter 2 says Lauren asked.<br /><br />Sorry for being nit-picky. Just thought I'd point them out. Aside from that, I agree with Molly. You do a really good job at bringing your characters to life, and you have quite a way of drawing the reader into your story's world. Well done.Antainenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7091756463128804432.post-10079463757032256252014-03-07T00:21:46.934-08:002014-03-07T00:21:46.934-08:00Thanks Molly! Maybe any plausibility in the portra...Thanks Molly! Maybe any plausibility in the portrayal is because I often feel like a fifteen-year-old in a thirty-six-year-old's body!<br /><br />I do often think that teenage characters in books and films are often too sardonic, cynical and lacking in a sense of wonder. I guess insecurity and wonder are the two edges of the same sword, when it comes to the teenage years. I can remember in school hearing other kids talking about a TV show called The Wonder Years and feeling a sense of wonder even about the title! My wife tells me it's a great show but I've never seen it.Maolsheachlannhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09406722311993627528noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7091756463128804432.post-20931826106689760682014-03-06T09:38:18.161-08:002014-03-06T09:38:18.161-08:00I like the way you portray young folks. In both th...I like the way you portray young folks. In both this one and "The Bard's Apprentice" (yes, more of that, please--when time permits!) your main characters think and feel the way I remember thinking and feeling in my teens. (So it must be right!) Maybe I've just read the wrong books so far, but it seems that in general a youthful protagonist comes across as an angsty caricature, or a cardboard observer. It's lovely when characters behave. . .like people! -MollyAnonymousnoreply@blogger.com